November 18, 2011
students who received the job. Frankly I came to Hangzhou, as far as I know the only one still sticking to the parodies PubMed students to read, sent me to encourage one another, of course, we also see the strength of these sentences is not a generic template or classroom can teach . My comments are below, the only way everyone will be more targeted to improve writing.
Zhang, today I parodies the first 06 years of reading the first paragraph. I quote:
① In spite of “endless talk of difference,” American society is an amazing machine for homogenizing people. ② There is “the democratizing uniformity of dress and discourse, and the casualness and absence of deference “characteristic of popular culture. ③ People are absorbed into” a culture of consumption “launched by the 19th-century department stores that offered” vast arrays of goods in an elegant atmosphere. ④ Instead of intimate shops catering to a knowledgeable elite, “these were stores” anyone could enter, regardless of class or background. This turned shopping into a public and democratic act. “The mass media, advertising and sports are other forces for homogenization.
my parodies:
According to the first sentence, I think 11 years of environmental protection, I wrote a incomplete sentence:
In spite of “endless talk of signifcance [g1] “, environmental protection is still a (long and winding) goal. I want to express “long way to go in goal,” did not think of a suitable expression.
the same time I thought pension Cup 2005, I wrote such a sentence:
In spite of “endless talk of family responsibility”, taking care of our old [g2] parents is still a headache to many young people.
According to the second sentence, I would like to up the cultural pot for 10 years, I wrote such a sentence:
There is “the combination of East and West, [g3] the compatible existence of different thoughts “characteristic of cultural chafing-dish. [g4]
According to the third sentence, I think the 09-year network Far and near, I write such a sentence:
People are involved into a “world of imagine [g5] ” produced by the 20th-century Internet technology that offered “vast arrays of informations ” in computer.
According to the fourth sentence, I think the American girl in 2002, I wrote such a sentence:
Instead of fashionable clothes similar to other American girls, it is traditional Chinese costume which universal in our Yun-nan province . not completely understand what you mean. But it is followed by stress, it should use that son. Many times they have to change, and self-improvement.
please help teachers to change, are you, thank you! I have a strong psychological endurance! Ha ha ha ~
Summer Intensive of the students [g1] is not fluent so realistic, meaning that, although everyone about the importance of commonplace, but what is the importance of it? You can be replaced even though we always emphasis on sustainable development, environmental protection, but the vision seems a long way to go. However, English is the continued development of sustainable development [g2] suggested aged, so more respect. [G3] What combination of East and West? Should not be a geographical section, right? [G5] virtual world? Imagination of the world? imaginary world